Monday, September 30, 2013

Correcting the Speechwriter

It's not something I get to do very often, but there was this one, glaring contextual error that cried out for correction in the first few lines of former Obama speechwriter Jon Favreau's otherwise fine article.

See if you can spot it.
House Republican Hostage Takers Are Unfit to Govern

They’re threatening an economic shutdown that will cause financial hardship and even ruin for millions of Americans. So let’s call these House Republicans what they are, says Jon Favreau.

The most terrifying speech I ever wrote for President Obama was one he never gave. On July 30, 2011, I began drafting an address to the nation about what would happen if Congress refused to raise the debt limit within 48 hours, thus denying the United States Treasury the ability to pay our country’s bills for the first time in 235 years.

Suddenly, all of the administration’s warnings from the prior few weeks became real...
Yeah, it's that last line:
 Suddenly, all of the administration’s warnings from the prior few weeks became real.
Jon, I'm pretty sure what you meant to say is:
Suddenly, all of those Liberal warnings from the past 30 years became real. 
I suppose I could also quibble with the use of the word "suddenly", both for the reason the late Elmore Leonard gave, and for the obvious reason that using a word which means "quickly and unexpectedly" to describe the latest, completely-predictable manifestation of the GOP's nihilistic destructiveness -- a trait which has been staggeringly obvious to everyone not paid to pretend otherwise for years -- seems like a poor choice.

But then I do try to edit with a light hand :-)

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